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At first, my eyes clearly caught in sight the model's face. She is unbelievably beautiful and through this image, I can see her determination and that she enjoyed the photoshooting.
I like the act that she's wearing white, this gives her a complete aura and blends pretty well with the background.
As for the technical aspects, it could have been better, as I think we all are in the process of learning and we don't stop doing that.
Her figure seems squeezed into the frame because the artist probably wanted to take a closer photo of her, because by shooting a wider frame, the expression of the model would have been lost.
I would have liked to see some sky, in order to balance the reddish contour on her hair given by the sun.
All in all, I think you had an inspiring experience, which taught you many things.
D.
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solloxr Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
I love how intimate this one makes the viewer feel.
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:iconphotabby:
photabby Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Absolutely LOVE this. Love everything about it. Model is simply beautiful and she really inspires me to restart modelling again! Thank you so much for posting this.
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hrbutunts Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Very beautiful
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:iconjackdornothing:
jackdornothing Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Excellent!
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:iconcarlosarte:
carlosarte Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
otrapal
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:iconauraming96:
auraming96 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
She's gorgeous
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:iconparislynne:
ParisLynne Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012   Photographer
Lovely
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amcforeverman Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
<3
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Fh3r Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
A beautiful molde + Sand = Great Photo!
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Fh3r Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Model :P
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venzipetkov Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Hi,
you requested Critique and here my brief observation:
1. the head is cutted on the frame line ( if you would draw this relaxed picture, would you draw the head contour exactly on the top frameline)
2. the eyes and the mouth have a strong meaning in portraits - one eye and the mouth are covered by the unordered hair without any sign of elegance. The viewer can suppose that the face is very beautiful but could not enjoy it.
3. if the intention is to show the elegant legs as a main object - why is the photograph vertically. And why are the legs with so much sand. It doesn't look beautiful.
4. the whole picture looks squeezed to the top because of abscence of air over the model.
5. the small piece of sky in the left corner has no correspondence and is unnecessary.

IMHO you had extraordinary beautiful girl, excellent light, romantic environment, but the result leaves the viewer unsatisfied and a little bit angry :).
I tried to analyse the picture objectively, so please don't be angry!!!
It's just one opinion. Maybe matter of taste. But if you decide exactly what you want to show to the external viewer, a clear idea to be expressed in the picture, I hope the result will be much better!!
regards
V. P.
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wurstgott Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
I can agree with most of the points you made, but mainly i want to thank you for a very fact-oriented (five points above) and fair/encouraging (bottom part) critique. This is rarely seen.
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venzipetkov Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
my only intention was to help. You win absolutely nothing if I told you "Great Picture", although seeing the errors you made by the composition :).
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wurstgott Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
But, like in your case, pointing out what you think could be done better and how, makes the big difference compared to comments just stating that they do or don't like it. And I really appreciate the fact, that you also point out that this is your perspective and you don't mean to offend anybody, makes it, an I think that is an important part, easier to listen to and accept the critique.
(Wie ich gerade sehe kommst/bist Du aus "Germany"; hab grad gedacht, das hät ich sprachlich auch einfacher haben können ;)
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venzipetkov Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Hallo Wurstgott,
ich weiss, dass es nicht einfach ist Kritik einzustecken, besonders wenn man glaubt man hat ein tolles Bild gemacht. Aber statt 2 Jahre zu warten um die Fehler alleine zu finden ist es besser jemandem zuzuhören. Und überlegen ob er nicht Recht hat. Es gibt Geschmäcker, manche mögen Bach andere Lady Gaga dritte die Kastelruther Spatzen. Aber nicht wenn jemand falsch singt. Dann muss man ihn das sagen, und nicht weil er schöne Stimme hat zu Loben, dass es geil ist. Ich versuchte einfach den Author nicht zu beleidigen und ehrlich zu bleiben. Dann hat man ihn geholfen. Wozu sonst ist the request critique.

LG aus Rostock
V.P.
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wurstgott Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Ich geb Dir vollkommen recht. Wie siehts mit Dir aus? Bist Du gut darin Kritik anzunehmen? Ich selbst werde zwar besser, aber bis jetzt konnte ich Kritik immer am besten annehmen, wenn sie nicht nur erklärend war sondern eine realistische (!) Alternative aufgezeigt hat.
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venzipetkov Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Schau einfach hier rein
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das ist ein Bild von mir und die Kritik kannst du lesen - aber mir fehlt Begründung.
Sonst wenn ich feststelle, dass ich etwas übersehen oder nicht genug Aufmerksam geschemkt habe, ärgere ich mich. Aber nicht dem Kritiker sondern mir. Es wird leider ziehmlich oft von allgemeinen Empfehlungen ausgegangen. Aber es ist mir öfters passiert dass durch Kritil meine Fotos durch Entsättigung oder Schwarz Weiss umwandlung sehr viel besser geworden sind. Deshalb bin ich ganz offen für Kritik. Aber bevor man ein Foto kritisiert muss man wissen warum wird das Foto gezeigt. Ist es ein Reportagefoto oder Fine Art Versuch. Was möchte der Author mit dieser Foto ausdrücken. Bei dem oberen Foto ist klar. Wunderschönes Mädchen in einer romantischen Umgebung bei Sonnenuntergang. Manchmal ist das nicht so offensichtlich.
Für mich ist Fotografie einfach Spaß und deshalb nehme ich das nicht so tragisch, wenn mein Foto als schlecht oder uninteressant von Publikum emfunden wird. Trotzdem möchte ich mich verbessern :).
Im Unterschied zu dir sind die Alternativen für mich nicht so wichtig sondern die Gründe - leider ist Kritik ganz seltend erklärend. Stärken und Schwächen werden leider selten angedeutet, nur Fehler (Ausrichtung Schärfe Artefakte)
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biggoofybastard Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
a horizontal of this would have been good too
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DesaturatedDream Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Professional Photographer
Very nice photo. The sand on the legs really adds to the subtle ambience! Good job :clap:
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